Saturday, November 26, 2005

A Voyage

Let's say we sailed the boat
But the weather was stormy.
We're not far yet, so let's to the shore.
Let's pretend we enjoyed the journey
And it was even better than we thought.

We saw the birds and sang with them
And heard the wind play in harmony
It was a pleasant song that will last forever.
Many generations will hum its melody
And will say it belonged to them.

We sailed with the wind and enjoyed the air.
The waves were jumping with our hearts.
The mermaids were merry and delight for our joy.
Fishes were happy and danced with the beats.
Everything shared us that it seemed unfair.

But in the deep sea there were sharks;
That forced us to the coast to haste.
From our merry they drove us away,
To go back to the real life for our best.
Hit us with the reality, our minds strikes

April 29th 2005


Blogger Morbid Smile said...

They are two in love, but their loves seems painful.

They enjoy their time with each other, everything looks pretty and nice, but there seems to be a painful end to this love, "the sharks in the sea indicate their pain and suffering".

This pain is forcing them to go back to the shore, which is reality. They are living a dream-like life cuz they want to escape from that pain, and cuz they might want to survive their love.

That's what I got so far! I hope it's true!! hey, girl, write more and post them here! I want to reeeeead and analyze! You said that my comments will help you with you writing skills. Your writings help me with "analyzing". You know, my M.A. major field of study is Modern American Novel, and your style is so good and needs physiological analysis as you said. And that's what I like ;) Good luck with your application.

See you soon!

11/29/2005 12:40 AM  
Blogger attawie said...

every word you said is right.
They will pretend they are having great times together and they lived to gether but as long as this love is never ment to live so they choose to have this love only in their minds.

The singing and dancing part only to explain how it would be if they live to love together.

I'm glad you are understanding my work. I hope it is understandable for every one reads it.

11/29/2005 3:09 PM  

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